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     Brocha updated 7 months, 1 week ago 6Members · 10 Posts
  • Brocha

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 2:47 pm

    Mindfield

    It’s a constant uphill battle,

    And I’m addled by this war.

    But I’ll stay astride my saddle

    And I’ll fight it to its core.

     

    It’s a struggle for survival.

    It’s a war daren’t lose.

    And I won’t! I’ll stay alive! All

    Demons dare me? I’ll refuse.

     

    No, I don’t know why He’s done it,

    And I cannot see His plans,

    But I’ll fight it ’til I’ve won it

    From my perch inside His Hands.

  • Elisheva Halle

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 3:35 pm

    Beautiful! I feel so empowered from this poem. Thank you!

  • Amalia Shaina

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 3:36 pm

    I really like this piece. The juxtaposition of the upbeat rhythm and the serious content makes it even more powerful. Which is what emunah is all about – finding the good in the unknown and  knowing Hashem is holding us throughout the journey.

    Hatzlacha raba.

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 3:43 pm

    Thank you, Elisheva and Amalia Shaina!

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 3:45 pm

    Oops. Sixth line should have read “It’s a war I daren’t lose.”

  • Chagit

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 4:41 pm

    Wow Brocha!

    This is a real masterpiece:)

    Love that it can be used for any and every battle that one struggles with…

    Thanks for sharing!

  • Anagrammer

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 4:52 pm

    Bracha, every one of your poems hits me in all the right places! I love how they are so individual, yet so universal at the same time, if you know what I mean. Your mastery at rhythm and rhyme makes it so easy and enjoyable to read what you write. The best part is that in every challenge, you manage to bring out a message of courage and inspiration. And I love the play on words you used for the title! So powerful.

  • Esther

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 5:51 pm

    Love the poem!  Reminds me a bit of something I wrote a while ago that was published in Twirl.

     

    Fighting for Life

     

    I’m a patriotic citizen

    I pledge my loyalty

    To one Capitol of Life

    The State of Reality

     

    There’s a national flag of pride

    That flutters inwardly

    In time to the anthem

    Of beating vitality

     

    I’m drafted in for duty

    Join the Corps of love and hope

    Fending off dark invaders

    Giving courage to cope

     

    The battlefield of my soul

    Is witness to destruction

    Spilled blood and sweat and tears

    Hate and evil corruption

     

    On faded khaki cloth

    I may deserve to wear

    A virtual badge of honor

    For bravery of which none hear

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 6:23 pm

    I LOVE it, Esther!

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 6:24 pm

    Thanks for your kind words, all

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