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  • The Feather

     Chaya F. updated 5 months ago 9Members · 13 Posts
  • Sury

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    August 15, 2020 at 10:19 pm

    A stray feather lies on the grass

    It shivers a little along with the breeze

    Pearly white with a hint of grey

    Stranded by its owner between the trees

     

    It sways alone in a feeble dance

    Snubbed by the vast world up above

    Thrust helplessly by the wind

    Detached from the plumage of the dove

     

    It had been the bird’s insulation

    The cushion against erratic weather

    Allowing the dove to spread wings and soar

    Performing its role as a perfect feather

     

    Yet here it lies in a field forlorn

    Its function depleted and potential lost

    Shed from the dove who’d endured a moult

    This little feather had been casually tossed

     

    For nights and days, it travels with the gale

    Across the field and over the stones

    Along the trees, around wildflowers

    A vulnerable little feather on its own

     

    Thenceforth, one day a man walks by

    Gazing down in a subdued, wretched stance

    A pearly white feather with a hint of grey

    Catches his eye as he stands in a trance

     

    Lifting it up his find with gentle hands

    The man strokes the feather in appeal

    It’s delicate and beautiful, ideal for a hat

    He sticks it in his own and turns on his heel

  • PassionforWriting

    Member
    August 16, 2020 at 1:16 am

    Wow, Suri, this poem is amazing and so touching!!

    It has a serene and innocence touch to it! Beautiful!

  • Meira

    Member
    August 16, 2020 at 3:12 am

    Wow, Sury.

    Absolutely love!

  • Fiction Fangirl

    Member
    August 16, 2020 at 3:43 am

    Heart-melting?  Check.  Evocative?  Check.

    …always conjuring artistic images in my mind.  You have enrichened my poetry reading experience once more.

  • Elisheva Halle

    Member
    August 16, 2020 at 4:24 am

    Beautiful, thank you for sharing…amazing how even a feather flying in the wind can capture a poet’s heart and turn into a true piece of art…

  • Brocha

    Member
    August 16, 2020 at 5:13 am

    I love it, Sury. The rhyme, the rhythm, the imagery… delicious

  • Mali

    Member
    August 16, 2020 at 5:54 am

    Dreamy. Gorgeous!

  • Sury

    Member
    August 16, 2020 at 3:56 pm

    Thank you all for your compliments! It truly means a lot!

     

  • HappiWriter

    Member
    August 16, 2020 at 10:43 pm

    Wow! It’s to explain my feelings…

    This is so so deep and encouraging.

    You have a way with words. 🙂

    Wanna see more… 🙂

  • Sury

    Member
    August 17, 2020 at 4:45 pm

    Thanks, Happiwriter 🙂

  • Chaya F.

    Member
    August 17, 2020 at 8:01 pm

    This is a beautiful piece of poetry!!! You definitely captured my heart! I had so many different thoughts on this and I was wondering, what were your thoughts Suri -when you were writing this? Would you share?

  • Sury

    Member
    August 17, 2020 at 11:11 pm

    Chaya, thank you!

    Well, actually when I was writing the poem I kinda also had many thoughts and ideas buzzing in my brain about it. One of them was the idea of having talents and abilities that for some reason can’t be used in some way (e.g. singing in front of men – kol isha), and making use of it in another better way (singing for old age homes, singing to bring happiness to sick kids…etc).

    Another thought that came up; having a personality trait e.g. jealousy, and learning how to use it for the positive instead of the negative . E.g. being jealous of a person’s good deeds, wanting to reach their level of achievement.

    But the one that I think plays the biggest role in this poem; relationships. Marriage…friendship…I don’t think I have to explain this one. Just read the poem again 🙂

  • Chaya F.

    Member
    August 17, 2020 at 11:37 pm

    Thank you Suri! Its absolutely beautifully written!! You are so very talented!!

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