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     Anagrammer updated 3 weeks ago 6 Members · 9 Posts
  • Anagrammer

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    October 30, 2020 at 1:54 pm

    This is a poem I wrote in high school. I’m curious to hear what you think 😉

    When teachers drone about the Civil War

    When siblings whine about the supper

    When friends talk about their camp

    I space out.

    When I have to write a factual essay

    When I have to babysit in a quiet house

    When I have to talk to a random girl

    I space out.

    When it’s past my bedtime and I’m in the shower

    When it’s the middle of the night in a long car ride

    When it’s the morning on the school bus

    I space out.

    When teachers share pearls of wisdom

    When siblings tell me funny stories

    When friends talk about my camp

    I space in.

    When I sit down to write a descriptive essay

    When I am hired to babysit for adorable kids

    When I’m on the phone with my best friend

    I space in.

    When it’s past my bedtime and I’m reading a novel

    When it’s the middle of the night in camp

    When it’s the morning of a school trip

    I space in.

    Space out

    and time lapses.

    Space in

    and time lingers.

    To skip a moment

    I space out.

    To live a moment

    I space in.

  • Sury

    Member
    October 30, 2020 at 2:41 pm

    Lol – great poem! Really relatable to any high school girl.

    Did you write this poem while you were spacing out of the Civil War lesson? 😉 Just curious

  • MH

    Member
    October 30, 2020 at 6:49 pm

    Wow! I really like this Anagrammer!

    It just flowed so perfectly!

  • Rochel Solomon

    Member
    October 30, 2020 at 6:56 pm

    That ending; WOW! So profound, so aware (despite what the title alludes;) I love the structure, the wording, the journey. I think we all can relate. Excellent job!

  • PassionforWriting

    Member
    October 30, 2020 at 8:34 pm

    Anagrammer, I love love it!! Your poem is very descriptive and I love you end with a period at the appropriate place and then start the next phrase. I struggle to figure out when to put the period and when to start again. I’d love to hear you tips if you have 🙂

    • Anagrammer

      Member
      November 5, 2020 at 2:35 pm

      Hi, PassionforWriting. I actually responded to this already, but it looks like it disappeared, so I’m reposting in case you didn’t see it. I decided to use periods in my poem. That was my use of my poetic license. I don’t think the rules for periods in poems are set in stone; it’s sort of just the poet’s call.

  • Anagrammer

    Member
    November 3, 2020 at 2:33 pm

    Strange. I responded a few days ago, and it seems some of the posts got lost….

    Thank you for the feedback! And yes, Sury, that was probably when I wrote it, though I don’t recall 😉

  • Elisheva Halle

    Member
    November 4, 2020 at 5:28 pm

    Wow! Amazing self awareness for a high school girl!!

    • Anagrammer

      Member
      November 5, 2020 at 2:33 pm

      Thanks, Elisheva!

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