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  • PassionforWriting

    October 28, 2020 at 4:43 pm

    Hi all! I wrote this poem in response to how I was feeling last night – not too good if you could tell… lol. And I’m thinking of submitting it (ya, again – after many rejects. I’m cautiously trying because ‘you never know…’

    Thanks for reading and can’t wait for your critique!!

    Pushing, pushing,

    Amidst Struggles,



    Not one to cave in,

    And an unstoppable drive.

    I yearn cautiously,

    Every so delicately.

    Maybe this time I will succeed,

    Perhaps this time it will work,

    Perhaps, perhaps.

    I Try again,

    And again,

    And… yet again.

    And I fail.

    Hopes dashed,

    But something inside me screams just keep trying,

    And my insides turn and churn and boil from the avalanche of emotions.

    I cling to Hashem as my Rock and Source of comfort.

    “Now’s not the right time,” I tell myself.

    And I adopt that mindset with a mixture of hesitation and comfort.

    Hashem, please help me, I beg, too detached to cry.

    But inside I am crying, without shedding a tear,

    A sob that only I can hear.

    My “inner child” is wounded and hurt (again!)

  • Bookworm

    October 28, 2020 at 5:40 pm

    Wow, Passion!

    You hit it!

    After reading your poem, I can literally feel what you’re going through! You express yourself so well!

    Hashem should help you overcome all your struggles!


  • MH

    October 28, 2020 at 9:56 pm

    Ah Passion this is so moving! My favorite line was:

    “But inside I am crying, without shedding a tear,

    a sob that only I can hear”

    So beautiful<3

    • Anagrammer

      October 28, 2020 at 10:50 pm

      Echoing MH – that was my favorite line, too. Beautiful, PassionforWriting! So heartfelt.

  • PassionforWriting

    October 28, 2020 at 11:00 pm

    Thank you ALL so so much! Your reflections and kind words mean so much to me! I think I’m going to (dare again) and submit it…

  • PassionforWriting

    November 19, 2020 at 9:38 pm

    So I submitted this poem to the Binah Magazine and it got rejected 😞. It’s so super frustrating especially because this isn’t my first poem sent in. Why can’t I be given a chance? I just feel so unrecognized and it just doesn’t seem fair. I apologize for my reaction, but I hope I can get Chizuk from my valuable Masterpiece’ers.

    Any thoughts and feedback are appreciated.

    • Bookworm

      November 19, 2020 at 10:57 pm

      Well, Passion, let me tell you something: I recently sent my poem to Binah as well and guess what?? Just today I got a rejection from them as well! And yes, I was super frustrated because it isn’t my first poem either! I can totally relate! If you want to publish your poem and you don’t mind not getting paid for it, there are magazines which welcome poetry, but don’t pay. You can let me know if you are interested in more information!

      Hatzlacha Raba and don’t get down! 😀


    • PassionforWriting

      November 19, 2020 at 11:18 pm

      Thank you so much, Bookworm! I really appreciate your validation and sharing your rejection piece – to know that I’m not alone. And yes, I’d love to get more information about those magazines you’re referring to.

    • Bookworm

      November 23, 2020 at 1:39 pm

      So, following web address is an online magazine, and they publish poetry, but I think also essays and stuff. https://holyzowiecomics.com/ They don’t pay, as far as I know. Email your submissions to: eliseteitelbaum@gmail.com I hope the email address is still right!

    • PassionforWriting

      November 24, 2020 at 12:37 am

      Thank you, Bookworm!

      How does it work? Is it an e-magazine? I’ve never heard of it.

    • Bookworm

      November 24, 2020 at 11:11 am

      Yes, it’s an online magazine, based in Israel, I think.

      I had a pleasant experience when I published my poem there. They responded fast and I had a friendly impression of them.

      Let me know how it goes!

    • Elisheva Halle

      November 20, 2020 at 1:47 am

      Wow, that was a fast response from them! There is so much emotion seeping from this poem, Passion! I know you’ll succeed in whatever it is you want to do!

      Happens to be, Bina rejected all my poems also. It seems like they are looking for something very specific—I def wouldn’t judge the quality of your poem based on their rejection

    • PassionforWriting

      November 20, 2020 at 2:46 am

      Thank you, Elisheva! Yup, lots of emotions here! 😉

      Yeah, I think they’re looking for a certain type… oh well.

      And, amen to your 3rd line! 😁

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