MemberSeptember 4, 2020 at 8:34 pm
I made up this poem for Tisha B’av and was going to post it but I felt a little scared. Honestly, I look back on it now and I see that it still speaks to me now during the aseres yemei teshuvah. I hope to be worthy of a beautiful year and sometimes I feel down because I am constantly rushing and doing and every time I think I take a step forward I feel like the yetzer hara is there to push me back even farther, especially during this time. So I hope this gives chizuk to whomever feels the exact same way:
Tisha B’av 5780
We are a people more tired and tried
More ruined than ruinous
We aren’t new to this
We forfeit our glory not by our rights
Rather for all of our wrongs
And we are forced to move on
As a unit we will never tarry
But this bears responsibility
I have more than myself to carry
And on this day we rise together
To address our fallen state
We ask ourselves
How long will we wait?
How long are we supposed to lament?
How many tears should be spent on
The stones they burned
The bones they break.
They were a cavalcade of destruction
We bit our thumbs for Your sake.
Through the rivers of blood was seen
The garish reflection,
a day of catastrophe.
And this is not just our origins.
A day like this repeats and repeats and unfolds
like an exhausted accordion.
Is that to be our song?
Is that the fate we belong to?
Where are the lyricists and the lyres?
The timbres and tambourines?
Where are Your ministers and Kings?
Those that delight in the dancing
Their legs are crossed
on the floor, mourning
At a loss- wondering
Where is Your glory?
Finish the story
Write up the day when we no longer have to cry
When no longer will we hide
When we can proclaim and sanctify Your name
And no one has to die
And when we finally will be elated
A people redeemed, no longer incarcerated
When You bring down Your house
In fire and stone
When you reveal Yourself
When You finally make yourself known
Will I be worthy
Will I be worthy
Will I be worthy
MemberSeptember 6, 2020 at 4:01 am
Beautiful! Thank you for posting! Please post more of your work!
MemberSeptember 6, 2020 at 4:12 am
Rochel, this is gorgeous! It really resonated with me. I especially like the way you ended it.
MemberSeptember 6, 2020 at 5:27 pm
It’s no wonder that your thoughts are also appropriate for teshuva season. I learned that the Tisha b’Av, the day we hit rock bottom and process where our bad choices brought us, is the beginning of teshuva, which is, how we get out of there and get back to where we should be.
And it works both ways: Part of the Yom Kippur davening is linked to churban. I’ve heard, on a simple level, to move us to tears because we have to cry on YK, but I’m sure it goes much deeper.
MemberSeptember 6, 2020 at 6:35 pm
The Perfect Poem. That’s all I can say.
I am simply lost for words.
Maybe an emoji would work:
MemberSeptember 6, 2020 at 7:02 pm
Surely a lot of emotions and deep thought behind this poem!
Thank you for sharing!
MemberSeptember 7, 2020 at 2:03 am
Thanks all I really appreciate the feedback. I was always scared of posting my work – I keep telling myself I’m lazy but I know I’m just scared. You’ve definitely helped me realize that I can do it. I’m glad to be part of such a community! You guys rock!
MemberSeptember 7, 2020 at 7:24 am
I’m new here, just joined yesterday so it feels a little strange to be commenting already but this poem – wow – it demands a response.
I feel like it’s got everything you need in a poem. Layers and layers of meaning – every time you read it you discover something new. Brilliant wordplay. Imagery, tired accordion – I love that.
Most importantly, I think, it provokes the feelings most appropriate for this time of year, first sadness, loss, grief then reflection, remorse and inspiration.
Hope that helps.
MemberSeptember 15, 2020 at 3:58 pm
May I have a moment
And have my thoughts seen,
Somewhere else other than
Typed in my brains screen.
External measures should be taken
Rendering ideas to fruition,
Perhaps the moment of truth has come
Ignoring beliefs of mere superstition.
Engaging in a courageous act
Connecting pen and paper,
Exuding indescribable joy
Swirling gracefully in my own caper!
MemberSeptember 15, 2020 at 9:41 pm
Chayala!!! That in itself IS a masterpiece, wow!! I’m impressed at how you came up with such good words and phrases for each letter!
Maybe I’ll share my acronym I once wrote 🙂
MemberSeptember 21, 2020 at 4:18 pm
Passion for Writing! Thanks! I love the simplicity and clarity of acronyms! Would absolutely love to read yours! 🙂
MemberSeptember 24, 2020 at 1:27 am
Rochel, this poem is stunning!! You have a talent for digging at the heart of your topic, transitioning from one idea, building to a crescendo, and wow…
Keep ’em coming!
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