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  • PassionforWriting

    Member
    July 1, 2020 at 7:21 pm

    Here are 2 poems that submitted it to the Binah, but didn’t get in.

    Any thoughts/feedback on it? I know they don’t rhyme, but they’re from the heart and have important messages. (I hope it’s allowed to post multiple poems in one response).

    Thank you!

    Music,
    Melodies,
    Niggunim,
    Heartwarming words that cut through your Neshama,
    Comforting words that cut straight into your inner being,
    Words that replace raw despair and fear with renewed hope,
    Words that take your breath away,
    Warm words that provide deep healing and nourishment for your Neshama,
    Words that offer hope, empower you and strengthens your Emunah

     

    Mindfulness:
    Sometimes we wish for extraordinary moments,
    Moments that are rich(er) and filled with stimulation,
    Moments that excite us and fill us with pride,
    Moments that are more than simple and richer than the mundane,
    Times that we wish are filled with abundant joy, pride, stimulation and more,
    Oh, how I sometimes wish I can “zoom” by those moments and get to the “real” ones,
    But I’ve learnt and am learning to look for the joy and meaning within those seemingly “small”
    moments,”
    To look for and search for those pockets of wisdom,
    Of clarity,
    And of… Serenity.
    Because if you listen and watch carefully, you will catch sight of many beautiful moments,
    True, they are smaller,
    But they are filled with so much wisdom and beauty.
    Listen to the silence,
    It’s our inner compass.

  • Leahle

    Member
    July 1, 2020 at 7:58 pm

    I love both of them!!! The Messages are beyond Beautiful!!!!!

    By the way, do you Play an Instrument?

  • PassionforWriting

    Member
    July 2, 2020 at 12:19 am

    [quote quote=19704]I love both of them!!! The Messages are beyond Beautiful!!!!! By the way, do you Play an Instrument?[/quote]

    Thank you so much, Leahle! I’m so happy you enjoyed them and “approved” of them! I actually used to take piano lessons when I was in elementary school, but I had little patience to sit down and enjoy the lessons, and thus, didn’t practice. But I kind of regret it now 🙁

    My friend plays beautifully and I just wish I could sit down and move my fingers like her, but I guess not. I do, though, love listening to music and famous contemporary (Jewish) singers. I find that the Hartzig songs really talk to me.

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