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     Brocha updated 5 months, 2 weeks ago 13 Members · 18 Posts
  • Brocha

    Member
    June 9, 2020 at 2:40 am

    Ma, I drink a bottle now.

    I got too big to nurse.

    I know that you still want to,

    and I’m sorry if it hurts.

    You whisper that you’ll miss me

    and our precious time to bond.

    Mommy, I still need you,

    despite my moving on.

     

    Ma, you see? I’m walking!

    I hardly ever fall.

    I do so much myself now,

    I can’t wait to try it all.

    You whisper that you’ll miss me;

    you won’t carry me as much.

    Mommy, I still need you,

    still crave your gentle touch.

     

    Ma, I see the school bus!

    It’s coming down the street.

    I’m clutching my new lunch box –

    and I know you snuck in treats.

    You whisper that you’ll miss me,

    and you marvel how I’ve grown.

    Mommy, I still need you,

    as I board the bus alone.

     

    Ma, my duffle’s bulging.

    The camp bus comes today.

    You tell me to be careful,

    to be mindful, to obey.

    You whisper that you’ll miss me,

    it’ll be a long four weeks.

    Mommy, I still need you –

    Though I laugh and call, “We’ll speak!”

     

    Ma, my flight is boarding.

    I’m going for the year.

    The Holy Land is calling me

    to learn and flourish there.

    You whisper that you’ll miss me;

    you can’t bear to be apart.

    Mommy, I still need you!

    I’m a little kid at heart.

     

    Ma, the music’s playing.

    We’re walking down the aisle.

    Your hand so slightly trembles

    as you try your best to smile.

    You whisper that you’ll miss me.

    For a moment, time stands still.

    But Mommy…

    I still need you,

    And I always, always will.

     

  • StoryLuver

    Member
    June 9, 2020 at 2:57 am

    Wow! This amazing. The rhymes, and the message. I thought I wasn’t a poem person but this stuff knocks it out of the park.

  • Elisheva Halle

    Member
    June 9, 2020 at 3:02 am

    Wow! Love this! Reminds us that we all still need a mother…

  • Esther

    Member
    June 9, 2020 at 6:07 am

    I’m crying.  Stop, I just put on mascara…

    I mean, no, don’t ever, ever stop.  I love it.

  • Anagrammer

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 3:31 pm

    I have tears in my eyes. This is gorgeous. I can’t say anything else. “כל המוסיף גורע”, I’ll just be taking away.

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 3:43 pm

    Thank you kindly!

  • Word Warrior

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 4:06 pm

    chilllsssss 🙂

  • Sury

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 4:27 pm

    Wow! What a beautiful, evocative piece of poetry, Brocha.

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 6:28 pm

    thank you!

  • Kayla-Oppenheimer

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 6:52 pm

    Brocha, that was such a heartwarming poem. I can hear the voice of the child as it reaches each stage, matures and develops,  and the last paragraph is so moving, raw, emotional, authentic.

    You whisper that you’ll miss me.

    For a moment, time stands still.

    But Mommy…

    I still need you,

    And I always, always will.

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 11, 2020 at 7:04 pm

    Thanks.

  • Leahle

    Member
    June 12, 2020 at 9:28 am

    Stunning! And so touching!

     

    Thanks for sharing

  • Pickupapen

    Member
    June 12, 2020 at 10:02 am

    Wow, Brocha. I’m not such a poetry person but I think you’ve converted me! Your poetry is phenomenal, always so touching. If you wanted to publish something like this, you could try sending it in to magazines around a month before the ‘back to school’ issues come out.

    please keep them coming!

  • Enjoys Writing

    Member
    June 12, 2020 at 12:52 pm

    This is so very touching and true. I love the message, the rhythm, the words, and the emotion. Amazing poem!

  • Sherry

    Member
    June 12, 2020 at 1:31 pm

    Brocha, this is poetry perfection! It’s like music and art in all one.

    And BTW, in all your writings, I love how you use concrete images and the senses to convey thoughts and emotions that are often hard to express in words.

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 12, 2020 at 1:32 pm

    Thank you!!

  • Chagit

    Member
    June 14, 2020 at 4:12 am

    Love the poem!!

    Actually came back to read it this morning, because last night, my 3 year old said: “When I’m finally gonna be big, I’m not gonna need a Mommy…”

    How’s that for echoing your sentiments? Or not….

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 14, 2020 at 4:32 am

    Don’t tell your 3 year old, but I’m an adult with a husband and kids thank Heaven and I still need my mommy

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