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  • Brocha

    Member
    September 11, 2020 at 7:36 pm

    Son

    I see you, my Bar Mitzva boy,

    And wonder how to bottle joy

    To keep it for posterity.

    Do you know what you mean to me?

    Fulfillment of my deepest dreams,

    And highest hopes. My boy! It seems

    The years flew, swift as butterflies.

    And through the coming what’s and why’s,

    May all your drive, sincerity,

    Your pull to spirituality,

    Remain with you, through battles won

    And mountains climbed. I love you, son.

  • Bookworm

    Member
    September 12, 2020 at 7:22 pm

    This is a gift I would call: “More worth than any other fancy gifts.”

  • PassionforWriting

    Member
    September 13, 2020 at 2:55 am

    Oh my gosh! that is such beautiful and heartfelt piece!

  • Brocha

    Member
    September 13, 2020 at 3:36 am

    Thanks 🙂

  • Anagrammer

    Member
    September 13, 2020 at 6:11 am

    Brocha, I am amazed by your poems time and time again! I love this couplet: Remain with you, through battles won/And mountains climbed. I love you, son.

    Also, the second line. You say I see you, my Bar Mitzvah boy, and then what is the thought that comes to your mind? And wonder how to bottle joy. I love it. So pure and simple…

  • riva pomerantz

    Administrator
    September 13, 2020 at 9:34 am

    OMG, Brocha! I can’t!!!! Your son is a very lucky boy, that’s all I can say… This should be framed!!! Please may I move it into Showcase?

    A huge mazel tov!!!!!

  • Sury

    Member
    September 13, 2020 at 11:45 am

    Brocha…once again you have succeeded in making a poem that mirrors your remarkable talent in blending words together in rhyme, rhythm and beauty!!! It’s exquisite!! Wishing you a big mazel tov!

  • Fayge Y.

    Member
    September 13, 2020 at 12:17 pm

    Mazel tov!

    Yes, what a gift! And if you have more boys, may you experience – and so beautifully and lovingly express- special sentiments for each.

  • Brocha

    Member
    September 13, 2020 at 12:51 pm

    Awwww, thank you so much.

    Riva, if you want to, sure.

  • HappiWriter

    Member
    September 14, 2020 at 12:52 am

    ????????✨

  • Elisheva Halle

    Member
    September 14, 2020 at 3:36 pm

    What better way to express your emotions on such a day than with a poem? Love!

    Mazal Tov!!!

  • Rochel Solomon

    Member
    September 21, 2020 at 1:55 am

    Mazel Tov! I am not a mother, but I have a sense of what it means to truly love someone to an unyielding extent by reading your poem. Congratulations on the milestone and you should have nachas although reading the line “do you know what you mean to me, fulfillment of my deepest dreams…” I can see that you already do.

  • Chaya’la

    Member
    September 21, 2020 at 4:08 pm

    Love it! That’s one lucky Bar Mitzva Boy, you’ve got there! Lots of Nachas! 🙂

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