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     Mali updated 5 months, 3 weeks ago 9Members · 11 Posts
  • Mali

    Member
    July 24, 2020 at 11:44 pm

    Shame has a friend

    A satisfying cure

    And when Shame stands alone

    She runs to it for more

     

    Shame sees no end

    To her flaming way to be

    So when Shame begins to burn

    She finds a way to flee

     

    Shame has a friend

    A very decadent mate

    A sweetly numbing pal

    That’s difficult to hate

     

    Shame sees no end

    To food’s denying power

    To its endless dedication

    To wipe away her glower

     

    Shame is very shameful

    Of the way she is unhinged

    So when Shame begins to live

    Shame begins to binge

  • riva pomerantz

    Administrator
    July 25, 2020 at 8:51 pm

    Mali, what a powerfully-written poem with so much raw emotion about a very real issue that many people face, using food to flee. What really made it stand out was the way you cast Shame at the very center of the binge. Thank you for sharing this with us–wow! I would put it in Showcase!

  • Mali

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 5:34 am

    Thanks for the positivity, Riva.

  • Chaya F.

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 6:42 am

    Wow! Awesome writing!

  • Esther

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 5:30 pm

    Wow, this poem is full of awareness & courage, despite the theme.

    And very well written.

    I think you should publish it, so that it can reach more people.  Sometimes just sharing, normalizing the addictive spiral, can help to break free.

  • Brocha

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 6:23 pm

    Mali this poem is brilliant. Powerful message and wonderful rhythm and rhyme. Thanks for sharing.

  • Meira

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 7:54 pm

    Mali, this poem is brilliantly written.

  • HappiWriter

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 8:00 pm

    Wow!

    The pleasant rhythm adds a softness to the topic.

  • PassionforWriting

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 10:20 pm

    I echo all the responses here, well-said poem!!!

  • A Willing Pen

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 11:45 pm

    Every part of this poem is amazing. I like the repetition of the Shame in the first line in each stanza. In fact, I love this personification of Shame, especially as shame is a universal emotion we’ve all experienced at one point (way more!); it’s a very relatable ‘character’.  The extended metaphors in each stanza is great too – ‘flaming’, ‘burn’; ‘decadent mate’, ‘sweetly numbing pal’. And the rhythm really draws you in. You’re sure talented ka”h!

  • Mali

    Member
    July 27, 2020 at 12:18 am

    Thank you all:)

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