MemberJuly 1, 2020 at 7:15 am
A bullet shot to pierce my heart.
A dagger sliced my soul apart.
A solid wall of hope and trust
Collapsed to nothingness and dust.
My admiration? High esteem?
Departed. Gone. As last night’s dream.
Respect and reverence spanning years?
It withered. Faded. Disappeared.
It trampled me beneath the dirt.
It left me spent. Tormented. Hurt.
MemberJuly 1, 2020 at 7:57 am
Can actually feel every ounce of betrayal you described here.
Here’s to hoping that you get the strength to get up and start again!
AdministratorJuly 1, 2020 at 10:56 am
I can’t even handle the extent of this brutal pain, described in such violent, vivid poetry :-(…
MemberJuly 1, 2020 at 4:10 pm
Keep writing. Don’t ever stop.
Your poems are alive! I love how you use italics (I have a personal affinity for them) to emphasize different words. And I say it every time, but your rhythm!! Astounding.
MemberJuly 1, 2020 at 6:58 pm
Hey this is so well written. Love the rhythm.
MemberJuly 1, 2020 at 8:17 pm
Thank you, all!
For the comments, the validation, the compliments 😉 … but mostly for the opportunity to therapeutically spill on you…
MemberJuly 2, 2020 at 1:52 am
Aren’t we lucky that as writers we can vent our emotions through poetry? Keep it up, Brocha!
MemberJuly 2, 2020 at 12:15 pm
Every word in your poem is 3D. It’s unreal how well you express yourself in poetry, Brocha.
MemberJuly 2, 2020 at 8:25 pm
Poetry is my therapy :-). Thank you, Elisheva and Sury
MemberJuly 26, 2020 at 6:36 am
<p style=”text-align: left;”>I can actually feel the pain. OUCH! Such vivid imagery! Keep going! I love your work!</p>
MemberJuly 26, 2020 at 3:45 pm
Thanks for the validation 🙂
MemberJuly 26, 2020 at 4:33 pm
Brocha, your poems are so powerful! I felt it, every word jumped off the page ….
MemberJuly 26, 2020 at 5:02 pm
Thanks so much
MemberJuly 26, 2020 at 6:34 pm
But the poem is wholly awesome.
MemberJuly 26, 2020 at 11:52 pm
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