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  • Betrayal for the third time :-). Sorry for the overkill.

     Brocha updated 4 months ago 10 Members · 15 Posts
  • Brocha

    Member
    July 1, 2020 at 7:15 am

    BETRAYAL

    Betrayal.

    A bullet shot to pierce my heart.

    A dagger sliced my soul apart.

    Betrayal.

    A solid wall of hope and trust

    Collapsed to nothingness and dust.

    Betrayal.

    My admiration? High esteem?

    Departed. Gone. As last night’s dream.

    Betrayal.

    Respect and reverence spanning years?

    It withered. Faded. Disappeared.

    Betrayal.

    It trampled me beneath the dirt.

    It left me spent. Tormented. Hurt.

    Betrayal.

  • Chagit

    Member
    July 1, 2020 at 7:57 am

    Ouch Brocha!

    Can actually feel every ounce of betrayal you described here.

    Here’s to hoping that you get the strength to get up and start again!

     

  • riva pomerantz

    Administrator
    July 1, 2020 at 10:56 am

    I can’t even handle the extent of this brutal pain, described in such violent, vivid poetry :-(…

  • Anagrammer

    Member
    July 1, 2020 at 4:10 pm

    Keep writing. Don’t ever stop.

    Your poems are alive! I love how you use italics (I have a personal affinity for them) to emphasize different words. And I say it every time, but your rhythm!! Astounding.

  • Drop-a-line

    Member
    July 1, 2020 at 6:58 pm

    Hey this is so well written. Love the rhythm.

  • Brocha

    Member
    July 1, 2020 at 8:17 pm

    Thank you, all!

    For the comments, the validation, the compliments 😉 … but mostly for the opportunity to therapeutically spill on you…

  • Elisheva Halle

    Member
    July 2, 2020 at 1:52 am

    Aren’t we lucky that as writers we can vent our emotions through poetry? Keep it up, Brocha!

  • Sury

    Member
    July 2, 2020 at 12:15 pm

    Every word in your poem is 3D. It’s unreal how well you express yourself in poetry, Brocha.

  • Brocha

    Member
    July 2, 2020 at 8:25 pm

    Poetry is my therapy :-). Thank you, Elisheva and Sury

  • Chaya F.

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 6:36 am

    <p style=”text-align: left;”>I can actually feel the pain. OUCH! Such vivid imagery! Keep going! I love your work!</p>

  • Brocha

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 3:45 pm

    Thanks for the validation 🙂

  • Meira

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 4:33 pm

    Brocha, your poems are so powerful! I felt it, every word jumped off the page ….

  • Brocha

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 5:02 pm

    Thanks so much

  • Mali

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 6:34 pm

    Brocha-:(:(:(:(:(:(

    But the poem is wholly awesome.

  • Brocha

    Member
    July 26, 2020 at 11:52 pm

    <3

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