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     Kayla-Oppenheimer updated 6 months, 3 weeks ago 7Members · 10 Posts
  • Brocha

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    June 19, 2020 at 8:36 pm

    Accused

    Your mind calls, “Order in the Court!”
    You bang your mental gavel,
    Peruse the evidence brought forth,
    Present the case unraveled.

    Your inner voice rings, “Guilty!”  and
    Your thoughts propose a sentence.
    And, shoulders bowed, I leave the stand
    Where I’ve been the defendant.

    With reams of documents unread,
    With justice you begrudge me,
    With words of truth ignored, unsaid…
    You claim your right to judge me.

  • Chagit

    Member
    June 21, 2020 at 10:45 am

    Love it! Message so true and so well written!

    Brocha, your poems are really outstanding- one after the next:)

  • Sury

    Member
    June 21, 2020 at 11:57 am

    This a such a powerful poem, Brocha! I love your rhythm…it just flows so eloquently.

  • Fayge Y.

    Member
    June 21, 2020 at 1:46 pm

    I like it. The meter, the pithiness. Though the backstory could be a personal narrative somewhere, yes?

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 21, 2020 at 1:54 pm

    The backstory is too personal to post, anonymity notwithstanding :-). Thank you, Chagit, Sury, Fayge.

  • A Willing Pen

    Member
    June 21, 2020 at 2:04 pm

    Brocha, you’re a master poet! I love reading your poems again and again, savouring each word, the rhyme, the rhythm, and they always evoke a strong emotional / intellectual reaction. Kol hakoved!

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 21, 2020 at 5:31 pm

    Awww… (blush) Thank you, Sherry 🙂

  • Anagrammer

    Member
    June 21, 2020 at 6:39 pm

    Brocha, your rhyming is incredible! It ‘feels so good’ on the tongue and always makes me want to read out loud :). I love ‘begrudge me’/’judge me’. This poem, in particular, is so profound – the brutality of judgmentalism presented with the metaphor of a court.

  • Brocha

    Member
    June 21, 2020 at 8:58 pm

    Aww thanks

  • Kayla-Oppenheimer

    Member
    June 28, 2020 at 5:17 am

    I like everything that is not said in between the lines and how the poem shifts from judging oneself to the last paragraph of other judging you. THere’s a lot of rhythm, it’s short and concise. The courtroom and what takes place at a judgement, gives the reader a chance to realize what really goes on when one judges someone else without knowing background material, without reading the “evidence”.  A great portrait of  judging oneself too harshly and judging another person without the facts behind the scene. A great poem, Brocha.

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