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  • Fiction Fangirl

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    June 2, 2020 at 10:23 pm

    Moved to tears here.

    I know it’s a cliche phrase, but boy do you know how to write.  Simply and utterly wow.  Perfect.  Is this a stand-alone piece?  Or part of a memoir?  The secret is a fantastic force in the story.  I would acknowledge feelings such as fear but the powerful dimension secret brings to the table takes things to a totally new level.  It makes your story stand out because it’s original.  The blend of second and first-person perspective is one of my favorites.  Second person POV creates a sense of urgency in the reader while the first-person perspective is the most intimate form of storytelling.  Do you have more of this?

    I can see this being a diary serial in either Ami Living or Family First.

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