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Moved to tears here.
I know it’s a cliche phrase, but boy do you know how to write. Simply and utterly wow. Perfect. Is this a stand-alone piece? Or part of a memoir? The secret is a fantastic force in the story. I would acknowledge feelings such as fear but the powerful dimension secret brings to the table takes things to a totally new level. It makes your story stand out because it’s original. The blend of second and first-person perspective is one of my favorites. Second person POV creates a sense of urgency in the reader while the first-person perspective is the most intimate form of storytelling. Do you have more of this?
I can see this being a diary serial in either Ami Living or Family First.